William+S

‘countless animals dying’ ‘fish full of cancers’ || Severn is displaying her shock and disbelief of how inconsiderate and self-centred the nation is. ||
 * **__ Technique: __** || **__ Example: __** (Quote) || **__ Effect: __** ||
 * Personal Anecdote: || I used to go fishing in Vancouver with my dad until just a few years ago we found the fish full of cancers. And now we hear about animals and plants going extinct every day vanishing forever. || Emphasising the fact that the fish were full of cancers captures the audience’s attention and informs them of what they are letting the world become. ||
 * Repetition: || “buy and throw away, buy and throw away” || The repetition used reinforces the fact that the nation has evolved around buying and not necessarily needing then throwing away, this conveys the idea of over indulging. ||
 * Emotive Language: || ‘starving children’
 * Listing: || * You don’t know how to fix the holes in our ozone layer.


 * You don’t know how to bring salmon back up a dead stream.
 * You don’t know how to bring back an animal now extinct.
 * And you can’t bring back forests that once grew where there is now desert. || Suzuki has used the technique listing to demonstrate and provide sufficient information to the audience in order to get the message across. ||

Response How does speech maker Severn Suzuki persuade her audience? Severn Suzuki is a 12 year old girl from Canada. She and a group of other 12 and 13 year olds are part of E.C.O. – The Environmental Children’s Organisation they are fighting for their future. She persuades her audience to stop poverty, save animals and to stop the destruction of the environment. Firstly, Severn has regularly used personal anecdotes to persuade the adults in her audience. She uses examples such as “I used to go fishing in Vancouver with my dad until just a few years ago we found the fish full of cancers. And now we hear about animals and plants going extinct every day vanishing forever”. This emphasises the fact that the fish were full of cancers captures the audience’s attention and informs them of what they are letting the world become. Secondly, her use of repetition is very powerful and reminds the audience on how lucky they really are and that they aren’t just the only people on earth. For example “buy and throw away, buy and throw away”. This reinforces the fact that the nation has evolved around buying and not necessarily needing then throwing away, this conveys the idea of over indulging. Thirdly, her widespread use of emotive language is seizing the audience’s attention and creating a vibrant visual image to draw their attention to her concern. Samples like ‘starving children’, ‘countless animals dying’ and ‘fish full of cancers’. This displays her shock and disbelief of how inconsiderate and self-centred the nation really is. Lastly, Suzuki provides a profound use of listing. For example you don’t know how to fix the holes in our ozone layer, you don’t know how to bring salmon back up a dead stream, you don’t know how to bring back an animal now extinct and you can’t bring back forests that once grew where there is now desert. She uses the technique listing to demonstrate and provide sufficient information to the audience in order to get the message across. In conclusion Severn Suzuki uses an extensive amount of persuasive techniques to convey how she really feels about the environment and provided a sustained and coherent response to the United Nations. Have you gone to sleep and woken up green and pale in fear of this idea? || Shakespeare’s extensive use of rhetorical questions evokes emotions through the audience and captures their attention when required. || And if you go one step further by doing what you dared to do before, you’ll be that much more the man. || The robust use of 2nd person pronoun “you” alerts the audience and informs them of what the characters are clarifying with one another. || Response William Shakespeare was an English poet and playwright, widely regarded as the greatest writer in the English language and the world's pre-eminent dramatist. He wrote Macbeth for King Edward the 1st. Firstly, Shakespeare’s extensive use of Rhetorical Questions evokes emotions through the audience and captures their attention when required. For example “were you drunk when you seemed so hopeful before? And Have you gone to sleep and woken up green and pale in fear of this idea?” Secondly, Lady Macbeth uses a variety of Personal Anecdotes throughout the play which entertains the audience and creates this idea of a connection between the audience and the actor. “But even as the baby was smiling up at me, I would have plucked my nipple out of its mouth and smashed its brains out against a wall if I had sworn to do that the same way you have sworn to do this.” This is a prime example of a humorous personal anecdote.” Finally, His robust use of 2nd Person Pronoun “you” alerts the audience and informs them of what the characters are clarifying with one another. An example is “when you dared to do it, that’s when you were a man. And if you go one step further by doing what you dared to do before, you’ll be that much more the man.” In conclusion William Shakespeare is the master of persuasion and uses a monstrosity of persuasive techniques to assist his powerful and humiliating writing.
 * **__Technique:__** || **__Example:__**(Quote) || **__Effect:__** ||
 * Rhetorical Question || Were you drunk when you seemed so hopeful before?
 * Personal Anecdote || I have suckled a baby, and I know how sweet it is to love the baby at my breast. But even as the baby was smiling up at me, I would have plucked my nipple out of its mouth and smashed its brains out against a wall if I had sworn to do that the same way you have sworn to do this. || Lady Macbeth uses a variety of personal anecdotes throughout the play which entertains the audience and creates this idea of a connection between the audience and the actor. ||
 * 2nd Person Pronoun || When you dared to do it, that’s when you were a man.

 Persuasive Text The death toll in the Christchurch earthquake stood at 65 last night, and there were fears it would exceed 200 as rescue teams in New Zealand's second largest city searched frantically all night for survivors. Up to 200 people were feared trapped in buildings that collapsed as an earthquake of magnitude 6.3 struck at lunchtime yesterday. Bystanders described the city as a war zone, with dead bodies lying on streets, buildings demolished, vehicles flattened , roads ruptured , and water and silt - earthquake liquefaction - swamping the central city. The blacked out central city was under heavy security last night. About 400 army personnel are expected to be on duty today. As aftershocks struck, office workers jumped from fourth floors, abseiled down the side of collapsed office blocks or were rescued by cherry pickers while gas mains ruptured, and fires broke out, threatening to engulf the city centre. Christchurch Hospital was unable to cope and the city ran out of ambulances. Private cars ferried people to medical help and many of the injured were taken to other towns. The Prime Minister, John Key, confirmed the death toll at 65. The opposition Labour leader, Phil Goff, who also flew to the city, said police had told him that between 200 and 300 people might be dead. The mayor of Christchurch, Bob Parker, said at least 100 people were trapped in about six sites and up to 200 people could be trapped across the city. I don't believe there will be thousands dead, but we're certainly talking dozens of people who are in peril and they may not be able to be saved. Last night Sky News reported that rescuers had pulled 120 people alive from the rubble. A state of emergency was declared and the central business district evacuated. Power and gas were shut off to prevent fire. The city's water and sewerage was damaged and people were urged to conserve and boil water. Mr Key said extra police and army reinforcements had been brought in to help. I don't think we can go past the fact that we may well be witnessing New Zealand's darkest day , he said. The Australian Prime Minister, Julia Gillard, told Parliament she had spoken with Mr Key. I said very simply to him that anything we have got that they need we will get to them. The air force flew a NSW search and rescue team of 40 to New Zealand and more help is on the way. At least 8000 Australians are thought to be in the area. The earthquake hit at 12.51pm (10.51am Sydney time). Another earthquake, measuring 7.1 on the Richter scale, struck Christchurch on September 4 and the region has since been shaken by aftershocks. Large parts of the city and suburbs to the south - including Lyttelton where the quake was centred at a depth of five kilometres - were hit. Wharves at Lyttelton Port, the region's main shipping terminal, suffered damage but reopened within hours. The earthquake caused the New Zealand dollar to drop by more than 1¢ against the US dollar. Economists believe the damage bill will exceed the $NZ6 billion cost in September. The manager of the data centre at the Institute of Geological and Nuclear Sciences, Kevin Fenaughty, said this earthquake caused more damage than the one in September because of its shallowness. ''It's a nightmare. A lot of people were just getting back on their feet after the original quake.'' There were fears for people trapped in offices including the Canterbury Television building and the Pyne Gould Guinness building. A group of Japanese exchange students were reportedly among those trapped. The historic Anglican cathedral has been the city's centrepiece for 107 years. When the September earthquake struck it stood firm, a symbol of endurance and hope. That time, much of the city was tucked up in bed, the CBD deserted. Not so yesterday. The CBD was on its lunch break. People were shopping, eating in offices or restaurants. A few were in the cathedral when the quake hit. The 63-metre cathedral spire rocked, swayed and fell. The dean, Peter Beck, could not confirm if any were under the rubble. We just don't know if there were people underneath, so all we can do now is just pray. Emotive Language, Powerful Verbs , Personal Anecdotes , Adjectives , Listing , 2nd Person Pronoun , Personification , High Modality , Alliteration

Excellent progress William. Your understanding of using the TEE acronym for analysis is evident in your homework pieces. It seems you still need to post your analysis of the New Zealand earthquake article - your analysis is thorough - you just need to write it up. I look forward to seeing your analysis of Henry V using the PETAL acronym - putting the IDEA or POINT first instead of the TECHNIQUE. Keep up the good work! Homework warnings: 1 APA progress: 1.5 Miss A.